Review of 'Escape from Palmar (Dagmarth, Book 1)' on 'Goodreads'
3 stars
Left an honest review because the author asked for one, and it hurts to write this. I'm sorry. They are aware of the issues with their novel and are working on edits. The book itself was pulled from the Amazon market in the meantime. Most of the issues within the book have been noted by other reviewers, and hopefully in the future those will be corrected for.
Went through a quarter of the book, and couldn't push any more. I hope this improves after a considerable edit because it has the merits of potentially being a good sci-fi/fantasy. The biggest service to it would probably be stripping the first 20ish%. Start the main character at Earth, at 8. Have the parents show their spaceship that they're tinkering on, and explain in under 500 words "We're from this planet. We escaped because of the Dark Lord, etc." Less is more, and the worst killer of fantasy in particular is too much or needless world building.