One silly thing is the map. So this plays on a landmass of unknown size, a west-facing peninsula or subcontintent, like Anatolia or Iberia. On it are five similarly sized countries in a rough quincunx shape. One in the north, one in the east, one in the south, one in the west and one in the middle. The one in the north is called Nander, the one in the east Estill, in the south Sunder, in the west Wester and the one in the middle Middluns. Ugh. That is about the least bad about the map. Where are all the ports? The cities on the river? Why isn’t there a small, coastal mountain range where the river flow away from the coast?


Another thing is one i really can’t stand: Katniss, sorry Katsa, our Heroine, has the “gift” or capital-G Grace of combat, that is, she has the ability to kill people: hit strong and hard, &c. To keep her as one of the good folks, and hav her train anyway, the author has people sentenct to deth sent to her to kill. No, no, no, no. I don’t care that most medieval societies had the deth penalty. This is yur work, take a stand against it! Oh, yu’re an Usonian and for the deth penalty? Yeah, i really can’t stand that. And being bludgeond to deth by a child in combat² would seem to be cruel and unusual to me, anyway



¹I’m using Simplified Spelling Board spelling as much as possible.
²At first i wrote “mock combat”. But their’s nothing “mock” about fighting for your live and then dying.